Talk:The Lord of the Rings: War in the North

Style/grammar

English is not my first language, but in any case I find this sentence awkward:

"Although the game includes familiar locations from Middle-earth it doesn't deal with the core story of The Lord of the Rings, instead choosing to create a tale which didn't happen but could have done."

It's especially the last part which reads wrong to me. Shouldn't the sentence rather be:

"Although the game includes familiar locations from Middle-earth it does not deal with the core story of The Lord of the Rings, instead choosing to create a tale which did not, but which could have, happened." --Morgan 13:45, 6 February 2011 (UTC)

I personally don't see a problem with the sentence - it reads fine to me. (But you may want another native-speaker to offer up their opinion, being, as I am, the author!)

There is a problem with your suggested "instead choosing to create a tale which did not, but which could have, happened.", though: you've created a subordinate clause meaning that "happened" applies to both "instead choosing to create a tale which did" and "but which could have" - "instead choosing to create a tale which did happened" is clearly the wrong tense. --Mith (Talk/Contribs/Edits) 16:22, 6 February 2011 (UTC)